Firstly， the editorial fails to avoid the flaw of the hasty generalization of different concepts. The arguer hastily equals the cases of cheating not reported and the facts that the students don’t cheat. The difference between the two concepts is that maybe some students who cheat didn’t be found out or the supervisor did not report their behavior. Perhaps the students help each other’s to cheat and do not notify faculty members others’ cheating behavior.
Secondly， the arguer does an incomplete comparison. A group of statistics was provided to convince us that the adoption of honor codes surly declined the cases of cheating which were reported. The arguer should tell us the result of the comparison with other colleges or universities as well as the variation. Perhaps other institutions that still adopt the traditional system decreased the number of cheating cases more sharply by using more advantaged electrical appliances.
Finally， the survey mentioned in the editorial is severely unreliable. The arguer fails to provide the evidence that the respondents are representative. It is entirely possible that the students who are willing to reject the behavior of cheating are more interested in responding the survey. Besides， the credibility of the survey is open to doubt given its loaded question. Students should be asked whether they would be less likely to cheat the honor code in place than with the traditional system rather than without.
To sum up， the arguer should provide the evidence of the decline of the cases of cheating rather than the cases only been reported， moreover， the arguer should compare the number of cheating cases with other colleges adopting the traditional system. Before been convinced， we should also see the survey the editorial mentioned being amended to be more scientific.
点评：开头不用重述原题 省下个两三分钟还可以多想下后面怎么写
avoid the flaw 没有这个用法。
手把手再教一下段落该怎么写/展开。
Firstly， the editorial fails to avoid the flaw of the hasty generalization of different concepts(一点内容也没有 全删掉). The arguer hastily equals the cases of cheating not reported and the facts that the students don’t cheat.(拉上去做TS) The difference between the two concepts is that(前面全是废话) maybe some students who cheat didn’t be found out or the supervisor did not report their behavior. Perhaps the students help each other’s to cheat and do not notify faculty members others’ cheating behavior.(光写到perhaps话没说完 后面至少再补一两句)
改完了就是
Reduced reports of cheating does not necessarily suggest the decrease in such an activity. It is absolutely possible that students collaborate in active cheating and pretend nothing is going on at the same time. So behind the fourteen cases per year the actual number of annual cheating cases may well be fourty， or one hundred and fourty， nobody knows. The statistics does not justifiably reflect the truth.(最后一句这里有个小小的收尾)
而且 honor code之前那个report前面没有写students这个限定词 而honor code之后都是students reported 这里可以做文章。假如把这一点再加入刚才这个段落 那就非常丰满了。
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